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Falling from grace (pt1) (Free verse) by sk8rs_rule_all
This galling feeling.....this inexpressible emotion.
So fathomless, so lonely, so empty.
I have yet to be caught, yet I feel as if I should.
Something is missing, something is lacking.
Im falling from you, I'm slowly losing grip.
Its got me dependent on it's ways, feelings.....
I loathe this emotion, I absoutely cant stand it.
Yesterdays feelings control todays emotions.
Yesterday is on my mind.
I'm wasting away, envisioning the memories of yesterday.
I cant love anymore, with these memories breaking apart my heart.
They sit patiently in the back, waiting to come out.
Yesterdays are lost in time, yet I continue to find them and bring them
back.
My heart is in knots, twisting itself with confused emotions.
I pray, I beg, for anything to come and hit me in the face,
because this emotion ins't me, its forcing me to fall from grace.
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9086
Posted: June 30, 2005 7:59 AM PDT; Last modified: June 30, 2005 7:59 AM PDT
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And don't say something inexpressible and then try to express it.
That's all I have for you - I can't barely get through the rest of it. Sorry. My God - use your words more precisely, use a simile or a metaphor. Make a poem for christs sake instead of an outline for one.
Never use "so" again.