Falling from grace (pt1)

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Jun 2005 · 2 comments

This galling feeling.....this inexpressible emotion. So fathomless, so lonely, so empty. I have yet to be caught, yet I feel as if I should. Something is missing, something is lacking. Im falling from you, I'm slowly losing grip. Its got me dependent on it's ways, feelings..... I loathe this emotion, I absoutely cant stand it. Yesterdays feelings control todays emotions. Yesterday is on my mind. I'm wasting away, envisioning the memories of yesterday. I cant love anymore, with these memories breaking apart my heart. They sit patiently in the back, waiting to come out. Yesterdays are lost in time, yet I continue to find them and bring them back. My heart is in knots, twisting itself with confused emotions. I pray, I beg, for anything to come and hit me in the face, because this emotion ins't me, its forcing me to fall from grace.

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[4] Shuushin 30-Jun-05/10:40 AM Reply

please don't describe a feeling with the word "feeling" in the description.

And don't say something inexpressible and then try to express it.

That's all I have for you - I can't barely get through the rest of it. Sorry. My God - use your words more precisely, use a simile or a metaphor. Make a poem for christs sake instead of an outline for one.

Never use "so" again.

[n/a] sk8rs_rule_all › Shuushin 2-Jul-05/6:04 PM Reply

I certainly will work on it. Thank you.