Shuushin30 Jun 2005

please don't describe a feeling with the word "feeling" in the description.

And don't say something inexpressible and then try to express it.

That's all I have for you - I can't barely get through the rest of it. Sorry. My God - use your words more precisely, use a simile or a metaphor. Make a poem for christs sake instead of an outline for one.

Never use "so" again.