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Alive (Free verse) by emilyowey There is nothing more sure
Than a change that comes of nothing
Than a brand new view of every sight
There is nothing worth holding
More than moments born from silence, nothing
More than the hours no one could plan
There is no sensation
Like the feeling of complete
And total surprise, like sunshine
Out of nowhere
There are no words
Like the ones no one expects
Like the sound of pure revelation
There is no thing more real
Than complete surrender
Up the ladder:
Chthonic Steppenwolf
Down the ladder:
Do you fit in-to the dark?
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Posted: April 8, 2005 11:54 AM PDT; Last modified: April 8, 2005 11:54 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8653 Comments:
I feel the repetition adds to the continuity and style.
Nothing is more sure
Than a change from nothing Than a new view of an old sight Nothing worth holding More than moments of silence, nothing More than hours no one could plan No sensation Like the feeling of complete And total surprise, like sunshine Out of nowhere No words Like the ones no one expects Nothing more real Than complete surrender
Excellent edit Dovina.
<3 Jason
First off there is a reply button next on the right hand side of every comment, use it. Second, its not about what you feel anymore the second you hit the submit button is it? You are being told, very blunt and honestly, that no, it doesn't add to the "continuity and style". It makes what could have been some okay verse, better used as toliet paper than read.
whoa! The first 2 lines don't really make sense to me, but I absolutely love the rest of the poem
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<3 Jason