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Alive (Free verse) by emilyowey

There is nothing more sure Than a change that comes of nothing Than a brand new view of every sight There is nothing worth holding More than moments born from silence, nothing More than the hours no one could plan There is no sensation Like the feeling of complete And total surprise, like sunshine Out of nowhere There are no words Like the ones no one expects Like the sound of pure revelation There is no thing more real Than complete surrender

thepinkbunnyofdoom 8-Apr-05/12:01 PM
Try not using the same word twice, much less beginning all of your sentences with "Like, Than, There, Mpre, And, Out", not only does it sound forced, It does nothing for your originality and makes your piece rather bland.

<3 Jason




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