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The Universe (Free verse) by durr_T_hip_E stabbing
all
love
infinitely
unites
heartbeats
raging
silence
perfectly
balanced
Up the ladder:
Alone
Down the ladder:
All About Me
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 2.3333333
Posted: March 22, 2005 11:26 AM PST; Last modified: March 22, 2005 11:26 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.6821256 Overall Rank: 12169 Comments:
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 82.39.21.223
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22-Mar-05/3:54 PM
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This looks like the output of an angsty Markov chain generator. Stop writing.
sausage
salami juice cointreau salsa peas jenny jones
Awesome - put the word shit in front of every word and you have it.
you guyz are all too beautiful for words.
peace, sean
Please do not associate my comments with those of any other user on this website. The fact that "we" (meaning the majority of people to have posted comments on your poems) find your poetry an unremitting conveyor belt of bow'l sausages is solely down to your own boulangarie of failure.
not to bad actually, but it could use some work for sure, perhaps if you left the one word per line format, and it into like a tanka or haiku or something it would sound better
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