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exercise

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Dec 2004 · 6 comments

Propel Fitness Water, A bland product packaged in a fancy bottle. I am one of those weekend poets everybody rants about. I download pornography off the internet, while reading my homework. I tried downloading to indie music to feel like I am in the scene. I watch Pimp My Ride. My cell phone has more recent outgoing calls than incoming. My buddy list is filled with people I do not know. My roomate's ex girlfriend tried to come on to me during a ski trip in West Virginia. She slept in my hotel room on the other bed. Random arrangements of letters do not make a picture or a poem.

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5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

A favorite of RION12.

6 comments

[4] Blue Magpie 15-Dec-04/12:33 AM Reply

A poem that passes judgement on itself is a novelty, if not a very good one.

[n/a] JoyLuck › Blue Magpie 15-Dec-04/12:35 AM Reply

yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 a 4!

[9] Dan garcia-Black 15-Dec-04/7:34 AM Reply

If you lose the last line, it does paint a picture.

My roomate's ex girlfriend tried to come on to me during a ski trip in West Virginia. She slept in my hotel room on the other bed.

My cell phone has more recent outgoing calls than incoming. My buddy list is filled with people I do not know.

[n/a] deleted user › Dan garcia-Black 15-Dec-04/9:17 AM Reply

Quendo

[7] Dovina 15-Dec-04/10:14 AM Reply

I gave you 7 because of the last line, which I take as mockery. Otherwise 5.

[10] RION12 7-Mar-05/7:01 PM Reply

Cool. I like the way you make everything sound so simple. I like that kind of stuff in poems. I rate this poem and poet a 10.