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exercise (Free verse) by JoyLuck
Propel Fitness Water, A bland product packaged in a fancy bottle. I am one of those weekend poets everybody rants about. I download pornography off the internet, while reading my homework. I tried downloading to indie music to feel like I am in the scene. I watch Pimp My Ride. My cell phone has more recent outgoing calls than incoming. My buddy list is filled with people I do not know. My roomate's ex girlfriend tried to come on to me during a ski trip in West Virginia. She slept in my hotel room on the other bed. Random arrangements of letters do not make a picture or a poem.

Up the ladder: Temporary moments
Down the ladder: Yellow Am I

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5688
Posted: December 15, 2004 12:28 AM PST; Last modified: December 15, 2004 12:28 AM PST
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[4] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.7 | 15-Dec-04/12:33 AM | Reply
A poem that passes judgement on itself is a novelty, if not a very good one.
[n/a] JoyLuck @ 65.60.139.26 > Blue Magpie | 15-Dec-04/12:35 AM | Reply
yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11 a 4!
[9] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.251 | 15-Dec-04/7:34 AM | Reply
If you lose the last line, it does paint a picture.

My roomate's ex girlfriend tried to come on to me during a ski trip in West Virginia. She slept in my hotel room on the other bed.

My cell phone has more recent outgoing calls than incoming. My buddy list is filled with people I do not know.
[n/a] deleted user @ 195.157.153.249 > Dan garcia-Black | 15-Dec-04/9:17 AM | Reply
Quendo
[7] Dovina @ 17.255.240.138 | 15-Dec-04/10:14 AM | Reply
I gave you 7 because of the last line, which I take as mockery. Otherwise 5.
[10] RION12 @ 64.136.26.226 | 7-Mar-05/7:01 PM | Reply
Cool. I like the way you make everything sound so simple. I like that kind of stuff in poems. I rate this poem and poet a 10.
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