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Perfect Time of Year (Free verse) by wilco
The dead leaves falling, Swirling, Fighting over the last bit of uncovered ground. The evening air turning Colder; Perfect if not for lack of a coat. Hopeful for a new beginning. Different, If not for a lack of change.

Up the ladder: Forgiveness
Down the ladder: Romans 8:28

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2552
Posted: November 3, 2004 7:31 PM PST; Last modified: November 3, 2004 7:31 PM PST
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Comments:
[8] edpeterson @ 68.79.60.123 | 3-Nov-04/8:13 PM | Reply
why not "leaves fall" and "air turns"?
[n/a] wilco @ 4.226.153.210 > edpeterson | 3-Nov-04/8:33 PM | Reply
I don't know really. For some reason I just felt that it sounded better this way.
[8] richa @ 81.178.133.114 | 4-Nov-04/1:22 AM | Reply
Sounds nice. 'Different, if not for a lack of change' is a decent idea but wrong poem I think (there is change if dead leaves are falling).
[n/a] zodiac @ 212.118.14.17 | 4-Nov-04/5:38 AM | Reply
I'm suspicious of poems which do that repeated-adjective-on-its-own-line thing. Call me screwy.

And I don't like the last two lines at all.
[8] Dovina @ 69.175.6.101 | 4-Nov-04/3:13 PM | Reply
Fall IS the perfect time of year in Tennessee, but to say that it is different, if not for lack of change, brings up images of good ol' boys, a holler an' 'shine.
[n/a] wilco @ 4.226.156.95 > Dovina | 4-Nov-04/4:35 PM | Reply
The different line is actually partially about fall and partially about a certain event that happened on Tuesday...;)
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