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Member since 2004 · Posted 7 Oct 2004 · 4 comments

Every time I think of you A tear rolls down my cheek When I think of what could have been A tear rolls down my cheek When I go to sleep at night A tear rolls down my cheek I cannot get you out of my head For I believe you are my true love And knowing it will never be sends A tear rolling down my cheek

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[9] BleedingRose 13-Oct-04/9:52 PM Reply

The style of this poem is such that I enjoy reading and often write myself. I vote 9 not because it is imperfect in structure, which I believe only adds to it's effect and value, but because I would not dare give it the extremest approval untill I have seen more of your works and had a chance to compare thier worth. Furthermore, knowing you personally as I do, I am left curious and somewhat hopefull of the discovery of the one you speak of.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-Oct-04/2:21 PM Reply

This is a disastrous attempt at poetry. It is among the worst I have ever read. The subject couldn't be less original, and the way you have written about it is utterly unremarkable. Your work is completely devoid of alliteration, simile, reification or any such literary devices. It is devoid of rhyme, devoid of imagery, and devoid of punctuation. The language used is whoppingly dull, and the overriding impression it gives is one of unbelievable mindlessness. The arbitrary line breaks and use of repetition are the only things that separate this bulgingly stupid dumpling from a blob of prose. Congratulations! -10-

[n/a] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 21-Oct-04/4:18 AM Reply

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[10] sir_heff 13-Dec-04/9:20 AM Reply

get out of my head!