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!!! (Free verse) by Jezabele-In-Hell

Every time I think of you A tear rolls down my cheek When I think of what could have been A tear rolls down my cheek When I go to sleep at night A tear rolls down my cheek I cannot get you out of my head For I believe you are my true love And knowing it will never be sends A tear rolling down my cheek

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 19-Oct-04/2:21 PM
This is a disastrous attempt at poetry. It is among the worst I have ever read. The subject couldn't be less original, and the way you have written about it is utterly unremarkable. Your work is completely devoid of alliteration, simile, reification or any such literary devices. It is devoid of rhyme, devoid of imagery, and devoid of punctuation. The language used is whoppingly dull, and the overriding impression it gives is one of unbelievable mindlessness. The arbitrary line breaks and use of repetition are the only things that separate this bulgingly stupid dumpling from a blob of prose. Congratulations! -10-




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