Re: The Golden Rule by Quarton	14-Jan-03/10:39 PM
The first sentence reminded me of this horrid children's book my daughter loves. "Cautiously, the zebra wanders across the plain Playfully, the giraffes dance and play in the water Determinedly, the cheetah seeks his prey." AAAHHHHH Not to say this poem is horrid, it is just all about god this and not god that and after awhile the spiritual quest or the finding of comfort in the lack of spiritual quest is tiresome. Of course, every writer goes through it at some point. It was just the starting sentence, the adverbial clause, reminding me of that horrid book where the clauses fill each page, and the pictures cannot ease the pain of hearing my voice read those sentences. The horror. Sorry. Carry on.
Re: Ode to the inafamous dark angel by Lucifer	12-Jan-03/11:14 PM
I think you should draw up a petition and gather up enough signatures to send along to Nentwhistle. Only then can we get DA off this site once and for all and stop him from hurting everyone's feelings. He has hurt mine so many times I cannot even begin to tell you. Okay, well, just one. It was late at night. I think it was Saturday and I had been drinking a little but not enough to where I was anything more than tipsy. And I had been working on this poem about my dear dead mother for 40 days and 40 nights. I even went out into the desolate dirty sands of Death Valley to conjure her spirit as a muse. You know, Electra complex. But in this case you could call it some form of ghostly...well, you get my point. So, anyway, I finally finished it. And I was so proud I called all my peeps and read it over the phone. It was 4am, mind you, but that was not an issue. THEY understood. And THEY loved it. Every word. I believe I made two peeps cry and that never happens, not in my neighborhood here on the mean streets of Misery. So I finally got up the courage to post it . And no more than two minutes past before that ominous blue 0 appeared. Then another, and another. And then a green one. And then another blue one. It was awful. DA may not vote for real, but he/she is the master of the blue vote. And then he/she left a comment saying my poems had -=aids=- or something and that as it read it made him feel like breaking wind and pooing and eating it!!!!!!!!!!!!1 Oh THE HORROR. I cried. I called the police. SLANDER, I cried. We must stop him. Let's ban together at once. Put the fangs in; dress in black. It is the only way. We must whine, cry, bitch, and moan three times more than we are already doing. It is the only way. The only way.
Re: Meditation 01 by Blue Magpie	12-Jan-03/10:55 PM
I want pictures.
Re: A Fathers Loss by Lanman427	12-Jan-03/10:53 PM
Sincerity gets you everything. Cannot not say too much about the craft here, but the sentiment is in the right place. It is just trying to find images to go with it. Maybe try to go back in to the lines and think about what you are saying and maybe try to create and image or a metaphor to convey those feelings. But on it's own, it is sweet at best.
Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub	12-Jan-03/10:48 PM
Yes, you were drunk. And it shows.
Re: Rose Wall by Carvaceous	12-Jan-03/10:46 PM
Sounds like a poem written in high school at best. But good try.
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	4-Jan-03/9:16 AM
You are so freaked out by votes that are missing my point completely, which shows nothing but your age. God fobid you ever get a rejection letter in the mail.
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/5:13 PM
Umm. Aren't you missing Pop Idol?
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/12:06 PM
Relevant. Bullshitting? I am not bullshitting. Descartes is a goof. You will learn that one-day when you have enough experience to write a poem about your experience rather than the experiences you gather from trying to write poems about dead guy's and their ideas. Nothing wrong with the ideas, per say, but maybe if they were in a more applicable setting and did not sound like a thirteen year old who has ejaculated for the first time, then maybe. Maybe you would advance. But this will come in time. Simplify. Put the ideas that you glean from books into your common experience. Then maybe I will give you a 5. But get over the whole who-gave-my-poem a zero. I will keep giving your poems a zero as long as you keep letting me know it bothers you.
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/11:57 AM
hahahahahahahhahahahaha
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/10:25 AM
Megadeath broke up. Noooooooooooooooooooooo. Is Dave going solo?
Re: End of life by kliq	3-Jan-03/1:04 AM
I never looked down at you and I never said any of those things. And I never shot anybody. It is lies, I tell you. Lies.
Re: a comment on The Fire Burns Bright (an Ode to Kaolin) by <~>	3-Jan-03/12:57 AM
It is the new and improved Horus8! Full of love and kindness. Batteries not included.
Re: a comment on Epistemology (2nd draft) by Ranger	3-Jan-03/12:54 AM
Ugh, okay, but it is getting a 1 from me. Did you like read this. "Scarlet bubbles?" "cold blade sought," "Escaping from this two-bit jail we sometimes know as life". hahahahaha. It is like a heavy metal pimple poem.
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/3:23 AM
I thought you knew everything about me. I had a love affair with a bullet when I was livin' hard as a street poete on the mean streets of KC. I do not know what dirty martinis are?
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/3:09 AM
No I am just trying to come down. And thanks to Horus8 I now have the sudden urge to listen to Everclear and go back down to the hood. Fuck, what was that. You will have to ask the writer of triangle poems in regards to the other question. I do not write in shapes, but I suppose there are those who do, and do it well, as she does.
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/2:50 AM
No, just a crack head.
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/2:41 AM
GO BEARS!!!!!!!!!!
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/2:11 AM
Yes, the year has not been so kind. Fair enough. Tomorrow it will be the last of it. Clear the trail.
Re: a comment on Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	30-Dec-02/1:52 AM
Frankly, I doubt he would give a hoot who you were fond of on this site. Besides, he has already endured the trials with God's Wife, who now despises me. If you hang out long enough, you most likely will also. So, where was poor sweet Nadine while you guy's were spending this "quality time" together. Was she slaving away to make rent at the fast food joint? Was she at the beach with the baby?