Re: Lonely Hearts by cjg	31-Jan-04/11:37 AM
This isn't bad. Of course, "lonely hearts" could be accused of being sort of a cliched phrase, and topic, but I kinda like what you did with it. Typo on lonely in L2, and I also think, in the same line, you could use a much more unique word than "smiles." "Hope at seventy beats per minute" is one of my favorite lines, as is "I flatline at midnight." I don't think you need to repeat lonely hearts at the end. Use something that implies it rather than outright saying it again.
Re: We are what we hold by somemorepoetry	31-Jan-04/11:35 AM
Not bad, either. It's pretty well written. For some reason, it's just not inspiring the emotion I think it's supposed to though. I'm kinda neutral on this one.
Re: Covers by sonawrote	31-Jan-04/11:32 AM
This is alright. The rhythm's good. But it's kind of...I don't know. Too generic, overall. I get no real vibe on the "I" or "you" portrayed here. They're kinda just cardboard cutouts. There's nothing that really gives you a unique voice. Oh, and "your looking" should be "you're looking"
Re: Hard Month by wlshepherd	31-Jan-04/11:30 AM
It does seem a little disjointed. But I kinda like it. At first, "Some snow cold bird" sounded a little awkward to me. I dunno, it could probably be fixed just by adding a hypen (snow-cold). I really like the line "Like that day the rain dog shivered."