on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit
23 Feb 2003, 8:38 PM
Detox? Recovery? Grief? Rebirth? All of these, and coffee. The protracted awareness borne of desolation, well sung. You have a bell of a voice, Mr. Knowit.
on Never Alone at Night by Limness
23 Feb 2003, 8:36 PM
I smile at your foolishness, and comfort you, dear. Move on, now. you must, or you shall waste.
on And Then She Got Over It by Freethinker1602
23 Feb 2003, 9:17 PM
Take notes as you walk.
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 8:49 PM
Well told.
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 8:41 PM
Ah, son. The pain of this stains the page, and stains me in the reading of it. Look to poetry for answers; keep your questions sharp. Your outcry here heard is one that is meant for the inner chambers, not the vast ethers. Inside, you may make something of it; out here, it bleeds into nothingness, and wastes you.
on missing time by Bill Z Bub
23 Feb 2003, 8:51 PM
Nice reconstruction of a moment gone too soon.
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 8:57 PM
But do dreams served up so late go cold before they are consumed? Or do they consume you? You should talk to the Limness.
on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>
23 Feb 2003, 9:03 PM
Your random capitalisation and punctuation errors distract from the punch of this; also, i tend to agree that the subject needs to be better defined for the reader to feel empathy on the order of magnitude you seem to be courting. S2L2 "then" should be "Than"
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 9:34 PM
Forgive my ignorance; I am new here, but, why did you waste our time with this?
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 9:35 PM
Point of view seems to shift. Never a good thing, unintentionally.
on some deleted poem
23 Feb 2003, 9:37 PM
The rhyming seems too forced to be effective; at the same time, the sing-song rhythm of this is eerily haunting. "sinewed cage" is a fantastic image.