Re: Xmas gifts list by lunar |
28-Jul-03/3:02 PM |
fake, originality is nothing if it dosent come from the heart and this sounds as if you have tried to use metaphors cleaverly instead of speaking what you treuly feel...therefore the poem is to impress rather than to express your emotion? pah what do i know!
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Re: a comment on Caged World by deep-as-a-puddle |
28-Jul-03/2:59 PM |
dearest, its about the fact that we are not allowed to live the way we want because someone else has an idea on how it should be done
(line 5) religion restricts the things that makes one happy
(line 8) someone who dosent want to follow set rules is made to do so
(line 10) cripples are constantly persecuted
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Re: The Birds by lunar |
1-Jan-03/3:23 PM |
IT DOSENT RHYME, AGHHHHHH! i really didnt like this the first time i read it but when u told me what it was about it all feel into place! its actually really deep! tr??s impressed!
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Re: me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar |
29-Dec-02/11:45 AM |
My crotch is a dark and evil place! i forbid ne of you to visit it! ass for it being up some strangers ass, ur completly and utterly correct! How did u ever discover this?
and hey come on, we were all 15 once! PSMA
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Re: one word by Blade |
23-Dec-02/1:45 PM |
HMMM, the poem has such potential, the first stanza is filled with anger and passion but as the poem draws to a final conclusion the overal objective is somehwta lost between the C and the K...close but only a 9!
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Re: Xmas gifts list by lunar |
15-Dec-02/2:29 PM |
Kool poem dude! I think love will bring him suffering tho!
Poetandknowit...hahaha what a brilliant name!...!
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