regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/8:29 AM
two things, one, this goes nowhere.. Personally, I feel that a poem that does nothing but raise questions deserves answers.. secondly, put away the thesauraus.. This has potential, though
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/8:31 AM
Love the beginning, love the ending, hate the 'dart of awareness'..
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/8:35 AM
You have said everything I've been thinking of late. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/8:38 AM
Well said. you've created a solid image
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/8:40 AM
I'm torn by this one. swearing in a poem for shock value, to me, is pitiful, unless your aim is to make a statement, which you avoided here.. you're attempt to be clever at the end, however, has me amused.. hence, I'm torn between hating this and being mildly amused by it
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/10:05 AM
hrrm.. hated it till I got to the last stanza.. reread it and it's not so bad. :)
Re: Dispersion by timfowler	20-May-02/11:48 AM
love it.. quiet table is a terrific bit, very expressively minimalistic
Re: Sick by timfowler	20-May-02/11:50 AM
reminds me of Quentin in Sound & Fury, coincedence? I'd be interested to know.. anyway, with that in mind, I like it.. without, it leaves me unsatisfied, not enough on the underlying subject matter.. well written though, very vivid
Re: Follow by unknown	20-May-02/11:59 AM
hrrm.. a stalker poem. unfortunately adolescent.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-May-02/12:00 PM
struck me as a little long for one point.. I got your idea in the first verse.
Re: The Spark by unknown	20-May-02/12:01 PM
I like it, it's airy, it's free, it's sweet..
Re: Morning Dreams by ObiWonKn	20-May-02/12:03 PM
awkward.. too much metaphor ruins the mood.
Re: The Green Emerald by ruella	20-May-02/12:04 PM
beg pardon? I liked the imagery until I got to the emerald.. what's the point? that an emerald is the key to your happiness? if that's so, you're just demonstrating the worst shallowness I've evern seen..
regarding some deleted poem...	20-May-02/12:07 PM
After reading many of your poems, I begin to wonder if you actually have anything to say and contribute, or just little attempts at comic exposition..