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Dispersion (Free verse) by timfowler
Fall away, retreat: laughing, across the tatooed landscape scattering like fireflies after the moment of thunder, singular splendour of the instant Sundered, washed away - we recall a crystal or two of joyful forgetting: a dozen places and poses once ours: now the past's possession. You feel it? A part of us gone, left in a glass, by a quiet table; under a seat on a train. So we are constructed - block upon block, and pulled apart strand by strand.

Up the ladder: Conquered Innocence
Down the ladder: I don't fit in

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.75
Weighted score: 4.8172355
Overall Rank: 10942
Posted: May 20, 2002 2:29 AM PDT; Last modified: May 20, 2002 2:29 AM PDT
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[8] malakin @ 148.108.1.56 | 20-May-02/11:48 AM | Reply
love it.. quiet table is a terrific bit, very expressively minimalistic
[8] evergreen @ 165.247.89.83 | 19-Jul-02/7:14 PM | Reply
'pulled apart strand by strand' - liked it.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 1-Sep-02/12:17 PM | Reply
tim you are a fowler 11!1
[4] little_big_nose @ 216.207.133.122 | 2-Jan-04/5:36 PM | Reply
I don't really like this one, I dunno why, and I wish I did so maybe it's help you, but I'm not that great, so don't listen to what I think
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