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Free verse № 2254

Dispersion

Member since 2002 · Posted 20 May 2002 · 4 comments

Fall away, retreat: laughing, across the tatooed landscape scattering like fireflies after the moment of thunder, singular splendour of the instant Sundered, washed away - we recall a crystal or two of joyful forgetting: a dozen places and poses once ours: now the past's possession. You feel it? A part of us gone, left in a glass, by a quiet table; under a seat on a train. So we are constructed - block upon block, and pulled apart strand by strand.

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4 comments

[8] malakin 20-May-02/11:48 AM Reply
love it.. quiet table is a terrific bit, very expressively minimalistic
[8] evergreen 19-Jul-02/7:14 PM Reply
'pulled apart strand by strand' - liked it.
[n/a] horus8 1-Sep-02/12:17 PM Reply
tim you are a fowler 11!1
[4] little_big_nose 2-Jan-04/5:36 PM Reply
I don't really like this one, I dunno why, and I wish I did so maybe it's help you, but I'm not that great, so don't listen to what I think