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Dispersion (Free verse) by timfowler

Fall away, retreat: laughing, across the tatooed landscape scattering like fireflies after the moment of thunder, singular splendour of the instant Sundered, washed away - we recall a crystal or two of joyful forgetting: a dozen places and poses once ours: now the past's possession. You feel it? A part of us gone, left in a glass, by a quiet table; under a seat on a train. So we are constructed - block upon block, and pulled apart strand by strand.

little_big_nose 2-Jan-04/5:36 PM
I don't really like this one, I dunno why, and I wish I did so maybe it's help you, but I'm not that great, so don't listen to what I think




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