| Re: Depression by terbenaw |
26-Feb-06/1:08 AM |
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| Re: Louwanda by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
18-Mar-06/7:43 PM |
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| Re: The Ocean by Fayt |
18-Mar-06/7:57 PM |
The only problem I have with it is it is an incomplete sentence, "bringing" being in the present tense form. You might try:
Gentle ocean waves,
Always moving with the wind
Breathe a life to all
But I'm not trying to write it for you. In fact, I don't really like what I wrote either X(
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
18-Mar-06/8:30 PM |
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Your Haikus aren't THAT bad for your's to be the worst three on the site, in my opinion. I give it a 6.
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| Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom |
18-Mar-06/8:36 PM |
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I would have given this a 4, but after reading 9/11, I would give it an 11. Exquisite literature.
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