| Re: On The Bench Outside Gruhn's Guitars by <~> |
1-Feb-03/11:26 PM |
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| Re: Why Me? by Tarquin De La Bog |
1-Feb-03/11:17 PM |
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I actually liked the story told from the speaker/rapist's view, but as I've noticed you do in other poems, you sacrificed rhythm for rhyme and that puts unnatural stops in the poem.
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| Re: missing time by Bill Z Bub |
21-Dec-02/11:19 PM |
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Wow, I really like this. I know the point of the "wake up" bit and that following it was to suddenly change the mood but it's too harsh a change to me. I think this poem should be ended at "you're late." *shrugs* just me...
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| Re: a comment on Morning Conversation by lexicon |
16-Sep-02/6:00 PM |
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hi, and thanks for the note. I purposefully left metaphor - or any poetic devices out. I just wanted to convey the plain ordinary life of a lonely woman and felt simple language would echo her simple life.
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| Re: Navel Action by BadPoet |
7-Jul-02/9:24 PM |
Hmmm I'm disgusted and somehow charmed at the same time
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| Re: incidentally, all royalties to the estate of WCW by lilli |
23-May-02/6:09 PM |
cute... I think WCW would have approved
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| Re: Waiting for things to Happen by nentwined |
20-May-02/3:44 PM |
I really enjoyed this whimsical poem. thanks for posting it
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