Poemranker [20 most recent comments by digipoet and replies]

replying on meeting her gaze by digipoet 18 Apr 2006, 3:19 PM

thanks for the comments ... it is supposed to be a humorous piece about not being able to get it up. I did overuse "face" in the poem. The "parcels" of your face is not about computers or technology, but suggests that a face can carry a range of weighty messages. The subject of the poem is happy that condemnation is not one of these messages, but remains humiliated.

Maybe three stanzas would be better:

the parcels of
your face i see
reflect no condemnation

my meager rise
its ceiling low
falls short of inspiration

can Icarus
spectacular
survive humiliation

on talkstupid by 7!3 18 Apr 2006, 12:16 AM

lol! nicely done

replying on metadata by digipoet 13 Apr 2006, 10:29 AM

It is actually metadata from a moment in time (01/01/00) - perhaps I need to make this more clear

on He Kissed Me by PoeticXTC 9 Jan 2006, 9:00 PM

i like it the emotion is strong i'd maybe cut the last two stanzas though.

replying on portrait of powerlessness by digipoet 9 Jan 2006, 8:55 PM

hmmm i already took off the line "why did you render me thus" but i can see your point too! thx

replying on floss every day by digipoet 9 Jan 2006, 7:20 PM

lol

replying on floss every day by digipoet 9 Jan 2006, 7:19 PM

rest assured the intent is decidedly sarcastic. :) thx for the comment.

replying on portrait of powerlessness by digipoet 9 Jan 2006, 7:15 PM

hmmm. no i don't maybe I should though I'll check out her poems.

replying on portrait of powerlessness by digipoet 9 Jan 2006, 7:14 PM

yeah it retrospect i agree the last line is kind of pointless...i guess i thought it was needed to emphasize the others actions towards the subject but it is already clear enough. thx.