| Re: Mid-July by Ranger |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
18-Mar-06/7:12 AM |
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Poe often rewrote his poems even after publishing them. He was THAT anal about them. Good stuff but these are the kind of poems you'll keep messing with.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/7:04 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/7:04 AM |
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No. Why do you draw that parallel?
(I'm devising a more extended answer to the initial question, justification will follow.)
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
18-Mar-06/7:01 AM |
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I'm sure they'd both be quite happy.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
18-Mar-06/7:00 AM |
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Here's a question. Is believing that love is more than a chemical reaction or that art is more than the conscious production or arrangement of sounds, colors, forms, movements, or other elements in a manner that affects the senses, is that the same thing basically as believing in God?
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:53 AM |
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Who knows...maybe he will. I wouldn't know who to feel more sorry for.
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| Re: a comment on My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:49 AM |
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Heh, go for it! Or rather, take a title (or phrase, or anything you like) and use it as inspiration for your own thoughts. Pick up a book of quotations - they are absolute goldmines of great ideas. The trick is to make it your own. I tried this in my last post ('Mid-July'), a sort of attempt at emulating Poe. Whether it worked or not is a different matter.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
18-Mar-06/6:45 AM |
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In a perfectly just world "Karma Chameleon" would have been grounds for Boy George's execution. In a perfectly Karmic world he would have came back as a lizard stuck in Richard Gere's ass.
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| Re: a comment on My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:36 AM |
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Yeah, I see what you mean. It might sound a bit more...erm, arrogant, perhaps, than the poem is intended to be. Whatever you choose, try to avoid the overused ideas ('God of mine', 'God' etc.). Be as original and innovative as you possibly can - believe it or not, a really classy title is a springboard for all sorts of ideas - you could well find it giving rise to a whole host of images that you can include.
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| Re: My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
ElmoBeavisButthead 152.163.100.65 |
18-Mar-06/6:31 AM |
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It's just I don't think it would sound right with "I" in there..
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:31 AM |
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Oh - and justice (ultimate justice) is also supposed to be unavoidable according to Christianity. You'll get what you deserve in Heaven, presumably.
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| Re: a comment on My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
ElmoBeavisButthead 152.163.100.13 |
18-Mar-06/6:29 AM |
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Gosh you come up with great titles! I may steal one of 'em..lol
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:29 AM |
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Good answer. But in a perfectly just world do you think they'd equate to the same thing?
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| Re: a comment on Looking Back by x0lovelylarnx0 |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:27 AM |
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'knowbody is perfect'...that is possibly the most ironic thing I've ever seen! I don't mean to sound harsh, it just made me chuckle. 'Element'ry' fits better than 'elementary' would.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
ALChemy 24.74.100.11 |
18-Mar-06/6:27 AM |
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Karma's suppose to be unavoidable.
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| Re: a comment on My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:24 AM |
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Oh - and I'd change the title. It seems like an exclamation at the moment and gave me a false impression before I read the poem. Don't be afraid to try a slightly more pretentious title (I love coming up with cool titles) - you could play on the biblical 'I Am' - which is the classic trick in a poem like this. So, for instance, "God, I Am" might work, or even just "I Am". What do you think?
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| Re: My God by ElmoBeavisButthead |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:13 AM |
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Hmm, I never was one for existential thought, but it's not a bad poem. I like the fact that it's concise, in a way, but then I'd also like to see it more...substantial, if you see what I mean. The first line sets a good tone for the poem; but as far as imagery goes you don't capitalise on the potential. I don't know, maybe you don't want visuals in here...that's fair enough, but my preference is to see something tactile - particularly something creative, something vivid and imaginative. Having said that, however, what you do say is said well...you don't give in to the 'preach-y' nature that often accompanies poems such as this. Have a look round various poems on here - see what you think to the styles kicking about.
7 from me - with any luck you'll get some useful advice from the better poets here.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:03 AM |
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Hmm, you'll have to take out the semicolon after '&' for it to work...copy/paste turns into copy/addsemicolon/paste here it seems...and I know nothing about computers, so I wouldn't even know how to avoid it.
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| Re: a comment on Numbers In Heaven by Dovina |
Ranger 62.252.32.15 |
18-Mar-06/6:02 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Looking Back by x0lovelylarnx0 |
x0lovelylarnx0 205.188.116.138 |
18-Mar-06/5:28 AM |
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I actually did not do that on purpose. I made a typing error. But down here were don't say elementary. We say elementry! LOL I had it written down as elementary. I just made a little mistake, and knowbody is perfect.
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