Birth...this is fantastic...:) Bethy *9*

Beautiful...*10* and a fav for me...:)Bethy

I am thinking mermaid...nice...:)Bethy

Dont you just love that name? Hows the road truckmeister?

I hate the restrictions of the sonnet form. But I guess if you give up the stricter Shakespearean ties, then its much easier. I think "we" would be better in "You let it go" to keep it personal. You could drop "ours" in "and then it wasn't ours" What are tenterhooks? The colons distract. Periods would be better. I would make the sex more tender in keeping with the nostalgia of the occasion.

I second what alchemy said and this is an awesome piece of writing - definitely in the top 10 I've read on here and elsewhere. Last line should be tenderhooks

Good take on the truck stop rest, especially "ice for the mind or a blanket for the heart." But the 24HR Mobile repair bit seems extraneous.

When you say ":) :)" in the title, I wonder if it's tongue-in-cheek. As I read, I think not. Maybe :-( And "Stupid" means something like "Arogant" Shave your legs, girl, put on a dress, and have a drink. That's what I do.

I want to go to Palermo and beat the crap out of somebody or give them all roses

Hey I think I'll call Phil...lol...I need some repairs...:) Bethy

If this is you, then back off from poetry for a while. If not, then crank out another one.

Hurts my brain, but worth it

Aren't Sonnets suppose to have 10 syllables in each line?!

thank god someone wrote a Sonnet using proper form!

Powerful stuff but "rubbing herself till I cried." was kinda creepy.

I like the somber rhythm. Wish you'd spell out linoleum.

mermaid?

what are Sea flowers? Maybe you mean Sea flewers.

mostly normal stuff. Stealing Dr. Hook is worth goin' after him for.

Kind of an Erma Bombeck rant. Dink will get a laugh no matter where you use it. Most men will turn Big Dink into a complement. It's just the way our egos work. He didn't deserve a poem anyway.