Actually.. that does work better lol. blessed with eight.

There was some idiotic rambling from zodiac, but I have spared the audience of his nonsense.

Much better than my first attempt at a villanelle was. Funnier too. Shrill knell. too good.lol.

Several of these lines are short syllables - 2, 5, and 7, to begin with. And do you mean for us to read "cursed" the -=Dark_Angel=- way, or the one-syllable way? You have both.

I don't know if you've read any of these, SD. I think they're pretty great. You have to scroll to the bottom: www.public.asu.edu/~aarios/formsofverse/reports2000/page8.html

cmon, as the rankerville jester i must disagree with that ole "suffering in public with a constant smile" bit.. and its comes off as cliche, as does most of the rest. blessed with six.

-10-

Perfect hazel. 9

Lord you are despised here, join the club. -=8=-

poop

hey high on, didga get your package?

Lets try this again...

people still wear those things? Horry shirt, what a roosah.

You'll think I gave you a ten because you made the change I suggested. Which is crap. Aside from not liking the ellispis after 'done', I have no criticisms for this. I think it's really sophisticated, even mature, for you. And I don't get a word of it. -10-

Cool. And all that time I thought you were a Greco-centric blackist on account of that other poem. One thing: I would say Peter Tosh (ie, black) instead of Bob Marley (mostly white) and Miles or Coltrane (again, black) instead of Ellington. Unless you're being ironic - I can never tell.

well.. that seemed easy enough. lol.

Atleast your room-mates don't actively rap.. and then turn around to claim "poetry must rhyme" when peaking over you shoulder as you write.. I think I had that stupid arguement with them ten times twenty and back again? But when I stole some of their crappy bland & unoriginal lyrics and made a rhymin parody? Them parrots haven't chirped since. Blessed with ten.

amen

I loved it! You need to tell me when you put your poems on! I wish i had your talent... my hero! 10 -- of course!

'About how you've worked for your glorified bona' -9-