regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 64.140.228.24	14-Jul-07/1:35 AM
Is the loved one anxious to be gone, or the relatives? works well either way.
Re: Accusation by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 64.140.228.24	14-Jul-07/1:40 AM
Very good.
Re: Settling in by INTRANSIT	some deleted user 64.140.228.24	14-Jul-07/1:53 AM
I love the imagery in this. The last stanza is really good--a great setup for the title--man and house "settling in" together.
Re: Nothingness haunts ... by Prince of Void	Prince of Void 80.71.124.22	14-Jul-07/2:42 AM
votes for despairs
Re: fear by BrendanElder	Prince of Void 80.71.124.22	14-Jul-07/2:46 AM
I Love it it's a great poem
Re: Losing you by forsaken	jerzeygirl22 68.37.7.89	14-Jul-07/6:38 AM
its not our goodbye..........your not gonna lose me
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 62.121.23.56	17-Jul-07/8:08 AM
I like this, it's wry. I think the apsotrophe should move - "Death's" - unless you do mean deaths in the plural. But hey, it's small thing, and the title is very good.
regarding some deleted poem...	Prince of Void 80.71.127.182	17-Jul-07/12:44 PM
well death's door....
Re: Song by Christof	Dovina 204.10.126.202	17-Jul-07/3:25 PM
"elocuted bitterness" is a nice expression, but I balk at believing that anyone would think that under this circumstance. The rest is nice.
Re: The Time-Winder's Lullaby by PsydewaysTears	Dovina 204.10.126.202	17-Jul-07/3:29 PM
How can a sin know anything? Otherwise nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 62.121.23.56	18-Jul-07/5:50 AM
"As flies to wanton boys are we to the gods; they kill us for their sport". A nice reversal of Shakespeare, though I think he said it better.
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 62.121.23.56	18-Jul-07/8:34 AM
1. I take it then that you don't particularly care for the entire history of English language poetry. 2. If you can't see how what you've written stands in inverse relation to that line from King Lear, whether intentional or not (it doesn't matter), then I despair.
Re: Yolande by thetrev	Ranger 86.131.44.93	18-Jul-07/4:35 PM
Is this a poeme or just rhythmic prose? I'm not sure that writing it with "poetic" line breaks actually contributes anything to it. 'Skyscrappers' is a typo, although it gives me marvellous visions of dive-bombing pigeons in Trafalgar Square.
Re: Song by Christof	Ranger 86.131.44.93	18-Jul-07/4:40 PM
Yesterday I officially became a Gradu-ate and the ceremony was splendid apart from a trinity of babies who managed to set up some sort of crying rota well in advance. As soon as one of the little fuckers had bawled its tonsils out another would pick up the chant with added smugness. So I must disagree that any baby speaks merely for the joy of speaking; it is more clearly for the joy of interrupting a solemn and dignified event.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.44.93	18-Jul-07/4:46 PM
Fun, I'm not sure if you have any stylistic reasons for the plethora of capitals though. Also, your love might be deep but I don't see how that automatically makes it like drowning in the Nile. It might be like the Nile - especially if your love has crocodiles in - but it doesn't make it akin to drowning.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 86.131.44.93	18-Jul-07/4:50 PM
No! We are not gods! Did you not listen to -=Muslim=-? In order to smite, one must be able to summon up the mighty power of ~*RAMADAN*~, otherwise it is not smiting, merely spanking with panache.
regarding some deleted poem...	Sunshine Conkey 75.171.17.139	19-Jul-07/5:52 PM
this is pretty good..unfortunately once you give anything away....it's gone
Re: Neil Simon is Living in My Lunula by MacFrantic	cheese.doodles 76.64.12.184	22-Jul-07/9:10 AM
I like the last stanza; the rest is a bit weak
Re: Reality by Sirens_Voice	cheese.doodles 76.64.12.184	22-Jul-07/9:15 AM
Wow, shut up already. This drags on and on and on, with no point...
Re: Operation Candy Apple Tango by thepinkbunnyofdoom	cheese.doodles 76.64.12.184	22-Jul-07/9:30 AM
Very funny and cute. I like.