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Exclamatory Abuse (Free verse) by Blindpoetry
SHUT UP! This is no desire! So let me go! Your hands are too cold! Your hands are too cold! For my warm heart! SHUT UP! This is just a dream! So float away! And leave this cold place! Leave this cold place! The warm room is only big enough for me! SHUT UP! This is no play! So please leave the stage! Your cold face stings my lips! Stings my lips! This is no desire, this is no dream, this is no play! So please step away! FROM ME...

Up the ladder: Dead on Arrival
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.4034123
Overall Rank: 3159
Posted: April 24, 2004 6:41 PM PDT; Last modified: April 24, 2004 6:58 PM PDT
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Comments:
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 24-Apr-04/6:52 PM | Reply
"to[o] cold" quick - fix and repost.
[n/a] Blindpoetry @ 68.106.171.15 > Shuushin | 24-Apr-04/6:59 PM | Reply
damn me and my grammar...

Thanks, again...
[8] wilco @ 24.176.102.131 | 24-Apr-04/7:26 PM | Reply
nice title. fitting.
[9] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 25-Apr-04/10:43 AM | Reply
unusual texture, conveys well.
[8] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 25-Apr-04/6:17 PM | Reply
We want authenticity these days. What ever happened to "All the world's a stage, and all of us goofballs actors"? Tell me to shup up, but I still see a lot of acting. And I sort of long for it to go away. Good thought.
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