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Despair (Free verse) by marjan
Through passages dark and cold I called Beauty once aloud, so desperately shouted I that the echo Was satanically blank. I doubted the answer was pretty sad, But went still on,"the next will be glad." As the night deeper in air and me sank I heard a churchbell out trembling rang, With hands pushed in pockets Out of the overhallowed catecomb I sprang; Saw the owls kissing children's little tombstones Saw Nature's Beauty smiling on broken bones. So hours passed in darkness dark, I waited still...a sight I had heard Would overjoy my heart; Sunrise! that's the thing you want!" It rose and smiled...I parted my lips There in church'es yard, a nun had sat couched On a garlanded grave,her cheeks wet with tears... I sighed and turned my back... There was something wrong with me that In each beauty blended I saw A note of" Down with Hell."

Up the ladder: The Shadow
Down the ladder: Reality

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7715
Posted: August 18, 2002 1:22 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2003 12:37 AM PDT
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[7] Katie @ 169.139.16.2 | 13-Sep-02/9:13 AM | Reply
I can't say i understand the poem to the fullest linght, but yet I like it, except for the hole it's all on one line, LoL. 7/10 =)
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.166.225 | 29-Jul-03/2:05 AM | Reply
i dont like the way you decided to present this thing, looks as if you were having seizures when you put this together.
[7] richa @ 81.86.245.194 | 29-Jul-03/9:06 AM | Reply
Kind of like the set out. You do it create pauses as the reader scans the page right?

I'm with katie when I say I can not really connect with the poem. I prefer more simple language to draw you in.

A very pretty poem, not sure where the logic is though
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