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ex (Haiku) by TheLegacy you pretentious bitch, i would
give everything i own for one more
chance to throw our love away
Up the ladder:
Another Date
Down the ladder:
Watching
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Posted: April 12, 2004 11:44 PM PDT; Last modified: April 12, 2004 11:44 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10890 Comments:
pretty good write, but not a haiku. It seems like it might be a hook for a longer poem.
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You don't have to stick to such a structure but the fact you did the numbers with words suggests a misconception.
The idea is ok but would be better as a throw away line not an entire poem.