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short clip about dc, #2 (Free verse) by jsd situated slightly outside society
in the heart of hypocrisy
oh, but this ain't just any city
it's the epicenter of pro-americana
where everyone's wearing their latest persona
Up the ladder:
The Thinker
Down the ladder:
Why you don't fall through the floor
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Posted: April 11, 2004 8:54 PM PDT; Last modified: April 11, 2004 8:54 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.537883 Overall Rank: 2516 Comments:
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ggawrysi @ 147.9.151.22
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11-Apr-04/10:40 PM
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not often that a very short poem tells a complete story with a distinct point... i don't know, maybe cuz i live in dc it makes it easier to understand it. regardless, well done
very kool, i like it :)
Succinct! The last line, though, "wearing" seems wrong, maybe something stronger like shouting.
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