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self indulgent teenage-style poem needed to spew out. (Free verse) by Roisin
You could have caught me we may have walked alone hand in hand down a crowded road in spring. I would have given myself completely and the past would have seemed as irrelevant as our hypothetical future is now. You unearthed something dead breathed life back in then left the foetal flame to burn out leaving poison behind.

Up the ladder: Walk The Boy To Circles
Down the ladder: In my train-IN

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5780
Posted: April 11, 2004 5:13 PM PDT; Last modified: April 11, 2004 5:13 PM PDT
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[10] tre @ 147.9.40.139 | 11-Apr-04/10:48 PM | Reply
ive been thru this exactly. good job.
[8] richa @ 81.178.214.38 | 12-Apr-04/1:45 PM | Reply
nice, but metaphors are supposed to track and flames burning out do not leave poison behind.
[n/a] Roisin @ 81.135.133.8 > richa | 13-Sep-04/3:53 PM | Reply
Yes they do if the residue is poisonous-get meh?
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