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self indulgent teenage-style poem needed to spew out. (Free verse) by Roisin

You could have caught me we may have walked alone hand in hand down a crowded road in spring. I would have given myself completely and the past would have seemed as irrelevant as our hypothetical future is now. You unearthed something dead breathed life back in then left the foetal flame to burn out leaving poison behind.

richa 12-Apr-04/1:45 PM
nice, but metaphors are supposed to track and flames burning out do not leave poison behind.




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