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Thank-you, outside (Free verse) by fevriere
Thank-you, outside For listening For not speaking You showed- Your faces showed Eyes of a milliard caressing greens Skies of blue Blank walls, the frills of frond and tendrils Those hot pinks Each one would tap on the bus window Like ivy branches, with fruitless fingers O you gave Regardless of anything You gave For this My heart grows wordless and wild

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Weighted score: 5.1589375
Overall Rank: 5106
Posted: March 17, 2004 2:29 PM PST; Last modified: March 17, 2004 2:29 PM PST
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[9] zodiac @ 152.30.44.39 | 17-Mar-04/6:04 PM | Reply
"milliard"?

Okay, here's the corny hi-i'm-new-to-poemranker review: I almost wish there was more story. What I get is: thank you, leaves, for listening to that terrible thing that just happened and not talking - more than something like: thank you leaves for listening as I'm talking right now, in this sentence, that I'm speaking, which ends right... here. But then I get no clue what they were listening to. Am I so wrong?
[n/a] fevriere @ 62.254.128.6 > zodiac | 18-Mar-04/9:57 AM | Reply
I like milliard. I hope it exists sensibly, unlike the background of the poem. Thanks for that, I hadn't noticed how surfaceful it was.
[10] deleted user @ 68.169.177.107 | 19-Mar-04/1:54 PM | Reply
So few listeners!
When I finally find one I go "wordlessand wild."
I like it.
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