Free verse № 77342
Dolphins Of Dorset
I loosened his Windsor knot
And stared at his scars from the crow
All dressed up, and for what?
But we âOwenâsâ always did put on a bloody good show.
He spent his whole life searching for God
And theyâve removed his glasses,
So heâll spend eternity lost
Wounded by the blades of Edenâs glades
Waiting for a wind that passes.
All I had was a memory
Dad always said itâs a true friend
But at times like this itâs an enemy
For my new start is our end.
But I remembered as a child
being covered in blackthorns when I played,
and you ran to the thicket to my aid.
I was bleeding and you told me to watch the Dolphins in the Bay,
There were no Dolphins in Dorset,
But as you removed the thorns with tender lips
The curiosity made me look away.
He stemmed the blood,
And on his shoulders I was a Giant.
He WAS my childhood and everything he ever told us
Speaks to me still
Though he is silent.
These are unsure times
And grief only doubles when you force it.
But maybe in warmer climes
Youâll remove my thorns as I look to the bay,
I will see Dolphins in Dorset,
And Dad I will not look away.
10 comments
And bless the rose that weeps dried blood
As its overcome by blackthorns." drop this because you told us already, and we know this, and then my friend, you will have yet again, a perfect piece. Congratulations. Make a note of it, for a future edit, if you want to keep your current scores. Here's a 10. I have some great dad stories too. But now I'm a dad, and I have no father. I never really did to begin with, but we were great friends at one point in time. Then it all ended.
Like the snappy wisdom (almost beatish) of searching for god, and memory is a friend.
One quibble, the final verse 'my thorns'. Seems detached from the earlier metaphor. Needs to follow through the image of cutting yourself on the thorns.
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