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Saying of Love

Member since 2003 · Posted 5 Dec 2003 · Edited 7 Dec 2003 · 5 comments

A figment of imagination Yet still reality and Still wondering how I and you Turned into we Amazed at how the love we posess Can be so wonderfully complex and multiple And yet dwells in simplicity Under Waterheavy flows Of intimate desires We transpire Flooding our fields with devotion As our sun rays Reflects affection from our outer layers Full of emotions With love as our roots We gain success At our quest To maintain happiness.

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[8] Shardik 5-Dec-03/4:18 PM Reply

"worderfully"?

[7] Shuushin 5-Dec-03/7:11 PM Reply

waterheavy flows - wary nyce.

I think its "how I and you", just for gigs. What do you think - does that sound right? "wondering how I turned into we", - versus "wondering how me turned into we" ... where are the grammar cops when you need them??

I think the shoes are a little heavy on this one, but there is a sense here with some word images that you are capable of much more.

[n/a] The_Third_Isis 7-Dec-03/9:17 PM Reply

ahhhh love,amore I've only tasted the ambrosia of this orchis/family but once [I mean the taste of love real love]it gave me asthenia.I am a godess so i recovered a bit quicker.I even lived in orcus because of it. My own creation..same birth mark distinguish from others characterize, make clear,boundary,mine. yet another century he is my bezel.Real love is eternal "Live as if you were to die tommorow.learn as if you were to live forever"
Mahatma Gandhi. this touched my diamond hard heart a 9

[8] Shardik 8-Dec-03/2:20 AM Reply

It's reak good but starts to go south especially at the last line. How about "a basis"?

[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos 20-Feb-04/6:56 PM Reply

I bet you think you're heaven bound?