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Broken Promise (Free verse) by VintageLove08
Lies, Lies, everywhere You don't care You don't care Break my heart time after time So often does the number climb What's another gonna matter? Everyday feeling sadder Anger rising No compromising You changed your mind? That's not surprising It's merely painful I've become disdainful Unconcerned But not ungrateful Enough with your distorted words The hope I had again is tainted Hide the lament deep inside Beneath a face forever painted

Up the ladder: Such is life
Down the ladder: Faded Passion

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.1666665
Weighted score: 4.7758822
Overall Rank: 11344
Posted: August 4, 2002 5:38 PM PDT; Last modified: August 4, 2002 5:38 PM PDT
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[10] ThoughtfulSoul @ 130.156.132.79 | 4-Aug-02/6:27 PM | Reply
good and very well written
[6] Zoe @ 84.13.3.103 | 10-Jul-06/4:18 AM | Reply
Quite nice... sometimes the content is dictated too much by the rhyme for me. And sometimes this tells too much without showing and letting the reader work it out themselves.
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