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Shattered (Free verse) by Katzclear
Surrounded by perfection Calm sweet serenity Not a flaw in any direction You are here and I am free..... Too bad my eyes are closed When this vision I can see I fear what will be imposed When the truth will come to be- My world is shattered- True reality sinks in This perfect vision fades before my eyes Prepare for real hell to begin. I can't keep a straight thought screaming voices I can hear All I'd known is now too far away Now all I can know is fear This world it spins before me I keep losing all control It's too late to help me now There's no use, I've lost it all My world is shattered True reality sinks in My world is falling down before my eyes Prepare for real hell to begin... No one now is safe to talk to; No where now is safe to hide Nothing good left to believe in; But nothing safe to keep inside. The voices they keep growing louder; the pain it burns within my head- I only asked one to confide in, but you gave a fatal fear instead.... My world was shattered True reality sank in Im bound in chains and taunted -is that what you wanted? Well my final wish now is the end.

Up the ladder: Black
Down the ladder: Snake in the Grass

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.2086053
Overall Rank: 4487
Posted: November 1, 2003 12:57 PM PST; Last modified: November 1, 2003 12:57 PM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 | 1-Nov-03/1:23 PM | Reply
Can't you write a poeme about something that isn't the amazing, magical thing you think of your life as?
[n/a] Katzclear @ 12.222.55.183 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 1-Nov-03/1:38 PM | Reply
I could. But I write about how I feel.... whenever I want to. This just happened to come about.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.116.54 > Katzclear | 1-Nov-03/9:40 PM | Reply
I would hijack an iron and straighten out my face. Then I would go door to door selling magic beans.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.105 > Katzclear | 2-Nov-03/12:54 PM | Reply
What happened to our conversation?
[n/a] Katzclear @ 12.222.55.183 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 2-Nov-03/1:27 PM | Reply
I just don't know.... what ever could have happened to our lovely conversation??? Oh darn.. I knew I shouldn't have clicked those little x's.... hmmm....
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.105 > Katzclear | 2-Nov-03/3:57 PM | Reply
why did you delete the conversation?
[n/a] richa @ 81.86.224.139 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 2-Nov-03/5:38 AM | Reply
I love the way you disguise pretentiousness with adolescent-style ruudness.
[10] tadpole @ 64.12.96.135 | 4-Nov-03/6:17 PM | Reply
There are definitely moments that I feel like that!. . .sometimes they are really long moments. .
[10] sliver @ 63.190.72.255 | 9-Nov-03/11:37 AM | Reply
The best so far A well deserved 10
[n/a] Katzclear @ 216.117.93.67 > sliver | 9-Nov-03/12:25 PM | Reply
Hey thanks for ALL the comments on all the poems. I read a few of your poems.. so far I couldn't give anything lower than 9 :)
[10] sliver @ 65.178.241.98 > Katzclear | 9-Nov-03/4:50 PM | Reply
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