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As It Is (Lyric) by Miggy Counting down the days
âTill I could bust the doors open
Now it is time to play
Than to do a single chore
(Bridge)
Itâs not that were even bad
Nor ever that I was sad
But Iâm going for something
Something elseâ¦
(Chorus)
Iâm a simple defiance
Not to gain the world
I need independence
To have another turn
Cause I am just a kid
Whoâs waiting for fun
So leave my life as it is
Then I could be someone
No more cheaply allowance
Hello brand new car
Hated curfew after dark
As now I can get very far
(Bridge)
(Chorus)
Finally getting out today
Never been so glad
Finding a new way
Cause Iâm never coming back
All you have are memories
Of the many years with me
I step into reality
Hoping to make you see
(Chorus/End)
Up the ladder:
Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter
Down the ladder:
The Spaz
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Posted: October 28, 2003 12:35 PM PST; Last modified: October 28, 2003 12:35 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.3576803 Overall Rank: 821 Comments:
Doesn't quite flow as smoothly as it could. It could be better.
Is it Jiz?
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and that first line in the bridge - maybe a missing word in there; give it a read.
lastly - the bridge was a bit soon for me. Maybe develop the hookline in that second bit and move the bridge down - just as a suggestion.