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As It Is (Lyric) by Miggy
Counting down the days ‘Till I could bust the doors open Now it is time to play Than to do a single chore (Bridge) It’s not that were even bad Nor ever that I was sad But I’m going for something Something else… (Chorus) I’m a simple defiance Not to gain the world I need independence To have another turn Cause I am just a kid Who’s waiting for fun So leave my life as it is Then I could be someone No more cheaply allowance Hello brand new car Hated curfew after dark As now I can get very far (Bridge) (Chorus) Finally getting out today Never been so glad Finding a new way Cause I’m never coming back All you have are memories Of the many years with me I step into reality Hoping to make you see (Chorus/End)

Up the ladder: The Spaz
Down the ladder: Eight thousand clay tiles

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.857143
Weighted score: 6.3576803
Overall Rank: 822
Posted: October 28, 2003 12:35 PM PST; Last modified: October 28, 2003 12:35 PM PST
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Comments:
[5] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 | 29-Oct-03/6:02 AM | Reply
I think it could be something, but it needs a hook, my friend - needs a hook.

and that first line in the bridge - maybe a missing word in there; give it a read.

lastly - the bridge was a bit soon for me. Maybe develop the hookline in that second bit and move the bridge down - just as a suggestion.
[6] newdawnfades @ 128.208.65.134 | 29-Oct-03/9:44 AM | Reply
Doesn't quite flow as smoothly as it could. It could be better.
[2] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 | 29-Oct-03/3:09 PM | Reply
Is it Jiz?
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