That touched me somewhere dear.
I think it was my wee-wee.

Didn't think the 2nd verse was quite as good as the others though. Better euphamisms could be had regarding gym knickers and "P.E.".

Good point, Darky (you don't mind if I call you that, do you?), although some of the current Japanese schoolgirls are becoming somewhat more modern, with dyed hair (it's hip in Japan to have blonde hair now, presumeably because it makes one appear more American) and glitter. But that's not quite up to the level of spiked collar and purple hair.

Thanks for your comment. It's nice to know that people who are jealous of actual talent leave low scores and mean comments. Maybe you can find some solice in those pretty school girls eh? lol. grow up, you fucking wanker. *skipping and giggling back home*

Yes i take your critiques on board, however i still feel we need to take vis-a-vis the forecoming masterpiece, whoes title i have yet to finalise. CHrist I fucking love you. Opps sorry for the outburst

Fascinating. My sister wears cotton panties too. I like her. She makes me smile. You people make me cry. I want sister's panties. Maybe your panties too. could you skip home more to the left. So, I can touch you. Cuz I'm not right, But panties are good. Who really fucking is lacking so much attention in their sociopathic existences upon this talentless lackluster site of shite. That they would stoop to the vile sand-in-the-eye extent of writing lyrics pertaining to their twat-molder-holders. Wrenching. All true I hope? Well me for one! I choose to wear none! Yes tis true. Theyt'wereall ruined by poo
10, well how about a 5 for giving me blue balls. Guess which one I gave you. It's the same number of licks taken to achieve the middle of the tootsie-pop. Sop

there are some disrupted rhythms here (such as "anywhere" in 2nd to last line),you've got a potentially good sounding poem, as long as you don't let your pervesrion cloud your craft. (and it is "memories")