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Bottom on the heath (Free verse) by ==Doylum If I were a bandit
I'd wear special kinds of clothes
A spangely top, tight leather mask
and laddered panty hose
If I were a bandit
You'd find me on the heath
With a special friend I met today
Whose names considerable Keith
If I were a bandit
'Stick up' i would shout
But only when in private
Could i carry such things out
If i were a bandit
I might ride a great black stead
But only when our Ken were tired
would i feel the need
If i were a bandit
I'd bandit every day
But this is all conjecture
Since I am not gay.
Up the ladder:
The Wrong Choice
Down the ladder:
spending time on the beach as the world comes sneezing to an end (Thursday afternoon)
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Posted: August 1, 2002 5:24 AM PDT; Last modified: August 1, 2002 5:24 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.1680884 Overall Rank: 4968 Comments:
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1-Aug-02/8:10 PM
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Yup. Crap. Shows potential, then falls apart.
Fuckkkkkklkkkk.,.i totally fumbled plains of africa part 7 ..it erased fuckkkkk.. it was great...it was perfect..it had taripin turtles and the cross eyed heynna and everything fuckkkkkk.and heron and fish and beak shit fuck now i gotta go play piano, but me memory is sharp and when i come back you are getting it!just for you ..you are gonna luv it so i'll leave you with part 1 and 2 in the meantime(1)
the rhino shits.its early in the morning as the sun begins to strike the hard green dew soaked plains under Killimanjaro. the hulking beast turns and hesitantly sniffs it's piled shit. the turdpack steams.a gazelle leaps quietly through the high grass. the rhino turns and lumbers off. his horn is up. his "hoof" trot high. the rhino squats low in the shade of the cypress..the lion pride stares and licks lips. rhino falls asleep with shit on heel. fly on horn tip.tail whips slow. o
thank you for the beginings of your magnum opus, i dare say that if you strive had enough you may manage to haul it up to a level just below mediocrity. I suggest you look at he works of forestchild7 for inspiration. Do keep trying i shall look forward to your next instalment.
that's where he put's the erased comments. the bottom of the heath. DA is a commenting burying basard, he makes it look like i'm dingy and talking to myself cuz the dark one removes his from inbetween. let us break wet wind in his study. not that he has ever studied anything other than little buy bottoms and dr. suess, upside down and upon his potty chair. poo on you two
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