Free verse № 66181
Spider Meth Adventure
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Just got away
from the spiders
and the web forest
in my room
and
have discovered that
I have a second name:
Spider-Maker
I created
an army of my own
specialy bred spiders
who are currently
conducting an invasion
and are determined to kill
then commit suicide
[Hallucinating on power-house stimulants is fun]
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[_] AABB rhyming scheme
[_] About romantic love
[_] About poetry-writing
[X] About suicide or self-mutilation
[_] Arbitrary indentation
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but in the third person
[X] Clerical errors
[_] Cliched imagery (staring out of window, pits of despair)
[_] Cliched rhymes (love/above etc.)
[X] Devoid of alliteration or any such linguistic embellishments
[X] Devoid of rhyme
[X] Devoid of simile, reification or any such literary devices
[_] Devoid of wond'rous or fantastical imagery
[X] Drug references
[_] Elves, unicorns, etc.
[_] Exclamation points used to mark 'the funny bits'
[_] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Leaving rant
[_] Lower case only
[_] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[_] Overabundance of ellipses
[_] Overuse of 'depression' words (putrid, wretched, darkness, etc)
[_] Pointedly unanswered questions
[X] Protagonist has a smug name
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] References to the author's 'social life'
[_] Repetition of a single word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_] Sanctimoniously moral
[_] Sentimental
[_] Self-pity
[_] Thesaurophilia
[_] Use of internet shorthand or emoticons
[X] Vicarious wish fulfilment
Squat thrust and peel back your face.
they can die while i reep the fruits of war.
im their creator, so they will obey!!
"I don't like spiders and snakes the way they move the way they shake..if a spider gets killed how does that make it rain...how can I be the one to blame."-bnl
I don't like spiders.
Wheelchair no sexlife
__________ X ____________ = A BAD TRIP
constipation Mechanical charisma
Could you imagine?
Da, (in mechanical voice tripping balls) -- Waht are you staring at?
7-11 guy -- (hindu voice) pardon me please?
Da-- I said what are you staring at towel head, quit looking at me like you want to buff my spokes, or clean my trachianomy tube vishnu, DAMN YOU. (he hits the button to activate his evacuation harness)
Hindu #2 -- That gross fucking mechanical dolly enbrowned my freshly waxed an sealed linoleum. I hate 4x4 with harnesses an angels, especially when they are stoned.
lol.. you should do a series..
Drugs, my lad.
i dont think im invincible, I've learned that in many painful ways.
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life is a goddamn 0 warranty zone, you can die by simply
standing on the sidewalk, a perfect choice
for a hit and run, or worse:
live only to
end up in a wheelchair.
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i know the risks i take, im probly more aware of what those risks are than you do.
your cute cliche "12 and -dude lets try drugs, i never had drugs-utterances are far from factual reality, im not talking out my ass when i say that i have studied heavily about nearly all substances able to alter a mans state of mind.
and dont try to save me, or impart your "sacred" fortune cookie wisedom, if the fools that came before you didnt effect me, then trust me, you will succeed only in looking cuddly and cute, yet still uptight.
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