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Addiction causing stupidity (Free verse) by LuckyJoe
Ring finger bonds sensation in matrimony, The caress of brassily hair, Silken to the touch. Addiction, its time to feed, Placing between fingers death soon to be lit. Thoughts going by faster than light, A young mind so bright. The light bulb long ago shot its spring, Darkness and dimming shadows did come. The thoughts still race at ungodly speeds, But from one to another they reflect, Thought has since lacked being direct. The warrior; stupidity, On the battle field of friends, Showing total neglect. A wage war on you! Stupid mind… You are mine!

Up the ladder: empty
Down the ladder: Involunarily yours,

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.4
Weighted score: 4.9284782
Overall Rank: 9341
Posted: September 18, 2003 3:43 PM PDT; Last modified: September 18, 2003 3:43 PM PDT
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[3] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.172.61 | 18-Sep-03/3:58 PM | Reply
well.. your writing convinces me that you are not in possesion of the ability to handle intoxicants.. my ole poem:

stupid after drugs, means you
were a good actor
before meeting your wife,
who is more charming than you are

:)

lucky.. why do you feel that adding all this extra wrapping paper will make the stupid message look pretty? it looks stupid, makes little sense, and everyone with eyes can see that your layin the bullshit HEAVY.. it stinks.. shovel it. 3
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 194.222.223.239 > DreamerSupreme | 18-Sep-03/4:33 PM | Reply
Says the person who wrote a poeme called "The Mellifluous Sound of God: Musical Eden", containing the line, "Phantasmagoric reality was injected into my universe".
[3] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.172.61 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 18-Sep-03/4:38 PM | Reply
it was better bullshit than this, and it made some amount of sense, though ofcourse it was fancy babble never-the-less.

The warrior; stupidity,
On the battle field of friends,

cmon now, atleast i didnt get corny.
[3] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.172.61 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 18-Sep-03/4:39 PM | Reply
PS: cant sinners be saved?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 194.222.223.239 > DreamerSupreme | 18-Sep-03/5:09 PM | Reply
Yes, but that means I won.
[3] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.172.61 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 18-Sep-03/6:04 PM | Reply
no, if you made me a righteous christian you would have won,
but i have simply decided to produce more "quality" and much less "quantity".

it was in my own best interest. you win an arguement, i improve and gain more skill.. i think im the winner, progress leads to better things.

what do you think? course, my opinion aside:

ok, you win. so what? want a cookie?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 202.8.187.72 > DreamerSupreme | 22-Sep-03/2:56 AM | Reply
What? It was in your own best interest to lose? So therefore you won because you lost (or something)? Don't be even more of an idiot than I think you are already just for thinking Watson was a detective. I can still remember the look of indignation on your bloated face as you responded to the "Musical Eden" debacle with cries of "FACT" and "tsk" and "musical eden: pure fucking crap created to see how well i could predict your pathetic ranting". Having given up on your attempts to convince the world that you've somehow been toying with me, you've resigned yourself to one last, desperate bid to save face. You think you're the winner because you've progressed as a writer? If that means you'll never use the phrase "exquisite melancholy of the supernatural" again, then it's as much a victory for mankind as it is for the withered prawne I see before me.
[4] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.70 > DreamerSupreme | 18-Sep-03/5:36 PM | Reply
I give drugs 7/10.
[7] Druid_Girl_1984 @ 209.214.109.199 | 19-Sep-03/11:02 AM | Reply
interesting......i like it, but KC it needs more flow. i don't want to sound like the rest of these mean spirited people, but it does need a little work, but i like it the way it is now. i am sure once you have time you will make it into a work of art. i have no doubt of your capabilities. = )
[n/a] deleted user @ 24.222.81.233 | 19-Sep-03/11:18 AM | Reply
This really sucks at my lovely sock.
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