poemranker ::empty by timvick473662003

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by timvick473662003

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Sep 2003 · Edited 15 Sep 2003 · 3 comments

Life is such a bore knowing all is for loss hiding in the shadows afraid of them all everyone is staring although no one is around holding on to nothing although it seems like everything a devestating loss but not a loss compared to what u have alone and with nothing i enter alone and with nothing shall i leave

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[4] nentwined 14-Sep-03/7:45 PM Reply
"staring" not "starring".

a common theme. This doesn't stand out for me.

though a bit of curiousity in "hiding in the shadows" and being afraid of "them all" (the shadows you're hiding in, or all the staring people that aren't there?)
[4] nentwined 15-Sep-03/6:39 AM Reply
why the "u" for "you"? is it part of the point of the poem, or do you think it's "cool"?

previous comments apply minus the "starring" (was the "u" there before? :/)
[10] Garrett S Sexton 15-Sep-03/2:17 PM Reply
Pixie poems. I love em {no-one writes about pixies anymore} well done 10