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empty (Free verse) by timvick473662003 Life is such a bore
knowing all is for loss
hiding in the shadows
afraid of them all
everyone is staring
although no one is around
holding on to nothing
although it seems like everything
a devestating loss
but not a loss compared to what u have
alone and with nothing i enter
alone and with nothing shall i leave
Up the ladder:
dinner salon
Down the ladder:
Addiction causing stupidity
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Posted: September 14, 2003 5:21 PM PDT; Last modified: September 15, 2003 3:18 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9284782 Overall Rank: 9340 Comments:
why the "u" for "you"? is it part of the point of the poem, or do you think it's "cool"?
previous comments apply minus the "starring" (was the "u" there before? :/)
Pixie poems. I love em {no-one writes about pixies anymore} well done 10
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a common theme. This doesn't stand out for me.
though a bit of curiousity in "hiding in the shadows" and being afraid of "them all" (the shadows you're hiding in, or all the staring people that aren't there?)