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diving (Free verse) by keatsImnot THE SERENITY BENEATH THE SEA
THE SILENT CALM TRANQUILITY
IT SOOTHES MY MIND IT PURGES ME
OF ALL MY SOULS HOSTILITY
WHEN I FLY THROUGH WATERS BLUE
THROUGH SHOALS OF FISH OF BRILLIANT HUE
A THOUSAND COLOURED CORAL TOO
I'M IN A WORLD THAT SEEN BY FEW
FOREVER I SHOULD LIKE TO DWELL
IN THIS WORLD BENEATH THE SWELL
WITH DOLPHIN TURTLE SHARK AND SHELL
AND STAY ENCHANTED IN IT'S SPELL
Up the ladder:
A prom that could never be
Down the ladder:
tai chi
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Posted: July 26, 2002 3:50 AM PDT; Last modified: July 26, 2002 3:50 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.192101 Overall Rank: 4620 Comments:
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pete @ 194.222.69.43
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26-Jul-02/4:23 AM
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the first two and a half lines made me laugh with its superposition of image forms (...screaming tranquility at us )..
de capitilize..and quit screaming..it would be so much better underwater quitely rendered 7/10. hocus.jaundice.lice.malicey
wow..this one is very good
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