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Padre's Gumbo (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer A tear drips into the stormy sea of my mind.
Carried within it, is a image:
The mirrored reflection of my father
being buried in water
and carried off into the pacific.
He was a swimmer in life,
receiver of the gold metal.
Now he only floats,
a spicy seasoning being sprinkled
into the giant soup pot
of earth.
Up the ladder:
Icarus Down
Down the ladder:
The Plea of the Beneathednessified (New poetry scheme!)
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Posted: August 14, 2003 4:48 AM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2003 4:48 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.3333335 Overall Rank: 846 Comments:
metal? medal? works both ways.. haha.. 10
well done. great emotionn.
Weird, if you ask me.
Should be no comma in the second line.
Should be- is an image- (an, not a) You might consider using "awarded the gold medal.", instead of "receiver of the gold medal"- just a suggestion. 402 view(s)
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and your signature food metaphor