poemranker ::Frayed Edges by ShellBell7799

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Frayed Edges

Member since 2002 · Posted 25 Jul 2002 · 3 comments

Ok, my limited use of colors and fonts makes this a lil complicated and doesn't really do the poem justice... but I really want to share and get feedback, so bear with me...the trick is, after you read the entire poem, go back and read the words in parentheses seperately, then the asterisks seperately, etc. *Thanx!* [how is it] *you* can (look) [inside] and *justify* your means? (!) your dreams, [your seams] (even your <FAKE> dramatic scenes are) all *frayed* at the *edges* *and* how could [you] have *ignored my tears* and [watched my heart] (still) [bleeding] (beating) [and] *how could you* have [neglected] ([me]) so*?* (<!>) when (I) was ([still]) left (Need)ing ? -*Shelly Keown*

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3 comments

[0] New Life Drug 31-Jul-02/9:38 PM Reply
huh?
[10] Service 8-Oct-02/10:02 PM Reply
Very well done. Very nicely portreyed. Imagery that sticks with you.
[4] ciantu 21-Nov-02/4:55 PM Reply
ok