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Frayed Edges (Concrete) by ShellBell7799
Ok, my limited use of colors and fonts makes this a lil complicated and doesn't really do the poem justice... but I really want to share and get feedback, so bear with me...the trick is, after you read the entire poem, go back and read the words in parentheses seperately, then the asterisks seperately, etc. *Thanx!* [how is it] *you* can (look) [inside] and *justify* your means? (!) your dreams, [your seams] (even your <FAKE> dramatic scenes are) all *frayed* at the *edges* *and* how could [you] have *ignored my tears* and [watched my heart] (still) [bleeding] (beating) [and] *how could you* have [neglected] ([me]) so*?* (<!>) when (I) was ([still]) left (Need)ing ? -*Shelly Keown*

Up the ladder: Synergy
Down the ladder: The Mirror Man

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.7058825
Weighted score: 4.740942
Overall Rank: 11711
Posted: July 25, 2002 11:22 AM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2002 11:22 AM PDT
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[0] New Life Drug @ 64.175.37.174 | 31-Jul-02/9:38 PM | Reply
huh?
[10] Service @ 211.28.96.37 | 8-Oct-02/10:02 PM | Reply
Very well done. Very nicely portreyed. Imagery that sticks with you.
[4] ciantu @ 216.128.129.242 | 21-Nov-02/4:55 PM | Reply
ok
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