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Frayed Edges (Concrete) by ShellBell7799
Ok, my limited use of colors and fonts
makes this a lil complicated and doesn't
really do the poem justice...
but I really want to share and get feedback,
so bear with me...the trick is,
after you read the entire poem,
go back and read the words in parentheses
seperately, then the asterisks seperately, etc.
*Thanx!*
[how is it] *you* can
(look)
[inside]
and *justify* your means?
(!)
your dreams, [your seams]
(even your <FAKE> dramatic scenes
are)
all *frayed* at the *edges*
*and*
how could [you] have *ignored my tears*
and [watched my heart]
(still)
[bleeding]
(beating)
[and]
*how could you* have [neglected]
([me])
so*?*
(<!>)
when
(I)
was
([still])
left
(Need)ing
?
-*Shelly Keown*
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.7058825
Weighted score: 4.740942
Overall Rank: 11711
Posted: July 25, 2002 11:22 AM PDT; Last modified: July 25, 2002 11:22 AM PDT
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