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Frayed Edges (Concrete) by ShellBell7799

Ok, my limited use of colors and fonts makes this a lil complicated and doesn't really do the poem justice... but I really want to share and get feedback, so bear with me...the trick is, after you read the entire poem, go back and read the words in parentheses seperately, then the asterisks seperately, etc. *Thanx!* [how is it] *you* can (look) [inside] and *justify* your means? (!) your dreams, [your seams] (even your <FAKE> dramatic scenes are) all *frayed* at the *edges* *and* how could [you] have *ignored my tears* and [watched my heart] (still) [bleeding] (beating) [and] *how could you* have [neglected] ([me]) so*?* (<!>) when (I) was ([still]) left (Need)ing ? -*Shelly Keown*

New Life Drug 31-Jul-02/9:38 PM
huh?




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