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Phantom Space Adventure (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer
Humid shadows hover, mirage like, over my skull as I feel the pull of magnetic energy surging through my pale ghosts skin. Pushing my arms forward, I begin my flight into a sky of ebony. The rain filled atmosphere clouds my usual clear perception of the stars as I attempt to ascend to mars. The winds flow pulls me back from space, and I feel the embrace of the reeling dusty tornado hurling me off course. Our planets gravitational force yanks my electric spirit back to the earth. I experience karmic rebirth into my agonizing mental cage; my prison of rage.

Up the ladder: Colors Speak...remember
Down the ladder: Caffeinated Contemplations

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.571429
Weighted score: 5.422622
Overall Rank: 2990
Posted: August 5, 2003 1:39 AM PDT; Last modified: August 5, 2003 1:39 AM PDT
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[4] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 5-Aug-03/7:27 AM | Reply
jim! i'm done for! a cosmic thread has warped and wrapped me, worm-and-black holed me...i die, a red dwarf among yellow giants....

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[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.170.253 > <~> | 5-Aug-03/3:48 PM | Reply
cool. ;)
[7] richa @ 81.86.73.151 | 5-Aug-03/8:15 AM | Reply
ghosts do not have skin,

other than that enjoyable enough, ending on a rhyming couplet is quite nice. Although again your 'prison of rage' belongs more in a pimple poem
[10] Garrett S Sexton @ 213.122.159.35 | 5-Aug-03/10:52 AM | Reply
RAGE, LOVE. FUCKING!!!! 10
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