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unlucky burglar, unlucky me (Free verse) by cacophony
tired of being the victim gonna set a trap got my shotgun piece of string gonna set a trap I'll aim it just to maim careful not to kill just off centre get his hand make the fucker scream behind the door we wait patiently me and my loose cannon the excitement makes me nervous twitch getting my own back then the creak the thief he comes my lock is picked I'm sweatin' now the handle turns it's in my eyes pushes the door bang wood and blood the gun goes off like a depth charge and hits him in the chest shit nearly took his head straight off my thief was left handed

Down the ladder: She Won't Wait

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5375
Posted: July 28, 2003 1:33 PM PDT; Last modified: July 28, 2003 1:33 PM PDT
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[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Jul-03/2:17 PM | Reply
Ha!
[8] SupremeDreamer @ 69.19.179.135 | 28-Jul-03/3:49 PM | Reply
Aye, home protection kicks ass.. ;) 8.
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