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The Rose (Other) by Queen of Tease Morning dew
On a rose bright and new
Standing there
In it's rose colored wear
Velvet soft
Is each petal that is held aloft
Gentle perfume
There for my nose to consume
How beautiful
Is the rose so lush and full
Silent soldier
That never seems to get older
All eternity
It stands there for me.
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Posted: July 27, 2003 1:03 PM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2003 1:03 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.134471 Overall Rank: 5526 Comments:
cute.. but.. sorry, not being mean, but this isnt my cup of tea.. blessed with 6
Quite the tease.
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"in it's rose colored wear"
i don't think a rose has one certain color.
One can prolly saw RED but they can also be white, pink, orange, a mix of all the three, or even violet.
and you used rose in the line above so it sounds repettitive.
"gentle perfume there for my nose to consume"
is a nice rhyme but the word consume makes me think of eating up everything greedily. gentle/consume sounds kinda weird unless you meant it.
u should keep it in a vase with water
or it will wither and dry