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waiting in my own way (Free verse) by rockinindividual
i walk the hallways of my dreams to find you hiding behind every corner i never figure out if youre just really quick or if there are many you's because i wake up and go through another day to fall asleep to dreams where i face many doors and chose one to find you behind it i never figure out if you're behind every door or if i just happen to open the right one every time because i wake up to monday morning thinking four more only four more and that night i try to push you out of my dreams slamming doors when your face appears and running from your smile as you step out from staircases and elevators and janitor's closets with doors i never saw your pursuit is relentless and I awake in a sweat thinking that ill just stay awake until you return ill just stay awake so that illusions of you cant haunt me cant tempt me cant fake me into happiness cheat me of my smiles ill just stay awake and greet you with open arms and dark circles under my eyes no i cant do that i cant do that i need to be happy when you come happy when youre real and so I sleep tentatively tip toeing around my dreams peeking in to see if youre there and then I drop in, following your confused shadows around the hallways staying behind you waiting in my own way

Up the ladder: motel 666
Down the ladder: Under a better bed wetter

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 6987
Posted: July 21, 2003 1:00 PM PDT; Last modified: July 21, 2003 1:00 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] richa @ 81.86.237.233 | 21-Jul-03/3:08 PM | Reply
cute first part but you seem to try too hard to ram the point home
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 21-Jul-03/4:09 PM | Reply
Kept my interest, and was well... cute, young and dramatically crushish, maybe if you could send me a shout of you in some cotton briefs back lit by purple candles with a short tight white tank top on nipples pushing through, black rose in your teeth, bach ringing through the air LEEEE DEE DA LA DEEE LEEEE DA LA DA LE DE WEWWWWWWWWWWEWWWWWWWEEEEEE <bow pull> <piano> <boink>

Ah, where was I again? cute, it was like hello kitty cute.
[7] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.181.119 | 22-Jul-03/8:16 PM | Reply
it bored me. ;/ 7.
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