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Class Life (Lyric) by lorigan85
Take me away from this class of bore Where our minds are locked in a store That allows no initiative for creativeness of our souls, holes tearing through our brains draining our uniqueness till we become sheep,sleep, its like they like it when they tell us to learn, concern is not an issue for most of them, men dont try they say and dismiss them for bums, well maybe im not that bright but i could have sight, for some-one like myself if i hadnt a preacher but a teacher who inspired, the fire and kept faith in me, maybe id be a little smarter in marter the school where im at, come-at me with a new schooling system and i'll listen, to those people who think they can make a difference, in the interest of the students to make them want to show up, not slow up, but get their HSC with pride, rather denied by the people who've pretended to care, is it fair? as the course gets harder, expectations arise till it, comprises of people who despise, alternatives to study and school, fool, why dont you play sport and hang out with your friends?, why dont you make it time for the end?, of all your excessive, impressive, depressive style you been in, open up and let the light shine in, then once you got a rounded lifestyle, then you can listen to the, your not trying, miss im dying, you should be flying, dont start crying, attitude, they say when you talk back, its like im being attacked, for trying to explain, the feeling and the pain, i get when i think of all it, its insane im still pumping alive, sitting inside this class.

Up the ladder: this feeling
Down the ladder: Car Ride

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Arithmetic Mean: 1.75
Weighted score: 4.6125903
Overall Rank: 12463
Posted: July 16, 2003 6:43 AM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2003 6:43 AM PDT
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[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Jul-03/2:06 PM | Reply
Wow, that was fucking horrible. Here's an 11!
[n/a] lorigan85 @ 210.49.76.3 > horus8 | 17-Jul-03/1:03 AM | Reply
that was horrible? wheres the constructive criticism? jesus how can someones feelings be so 'fucking horrible' an 11 out of what 100? gee dude if u feel that way keep ur opinions out of it. not everyone is pros. i just started writing and i aint making no excuses neither cos i enjoy it and i think thats what poetry is all about, so the bottom line is shut the fuck up, ok?
[n/a] JoyLuck @ 68.75.19.248 > lorigan85 | 17-Jul-03/1:42 AM | Reply
oh my!
[n/a] lorigan85 @ 210.49.76.3 > JoyLuck | 17-Jul-03/5:39 AM | Reply
? listen guys im sorta in a bad mood, feeling abit jaded im sure u've had the feeling..about school, life, and the HSC. But i wasnt expecting someone to go "that was horrible" , aint no confidence boosters to anyone..so yeh sorry if i sound like a bitch i just thought it might make sense even to 1 other person.
[n/a] JoyLuck @ 68.75.25.82 > lorigan85 | 17-Jul-03/9:32 AM | Reply
*tear*
[3] Terence @ 195.157.153.253 | 17-Jul-03/7:36 AM | Reply
This poem is still a jumble of raw emotion. It needs to be beaten into shape a bit more.
[n/a] lorigan85 @ 210.49.76.3 > Terence | 17-Jul-03/8:27 AM | Reply
hey dude, thanks for your constructive criticism, serious, thats helpful. i wrote this listening to eminem music, and i suppose writing in the mood i was in was described precisely in your use of "jumble of raw emotion" cheers . ;)
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