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Free verse № 55080

touch of the grass

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Jul 2003 · 4 comments

In the morning, even before the dog is awake I have put on all my dreaming clothes and walked outside across the lawn with my shoes in my hand. But this will not be enough: the touch of the grass will taste like green teeth, and the hammock, stretched between the unpruned apple trees, can barely hold the day's weight. I must keep saying to myself, lean back, back far enough until you see the apples fading from red to pale blue and feel the ground underneath inhaling, pulling through the squares of rope one by one like pieces of sleep.

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[10] Bill Z Bub 4-Jul-03/7:08 PM Reply
Green teeth. Exquisite.
I raise my coffee cup to you, sir. Salut!
This is what happens when I'm away from this site for a month.

[n/a] david › Bill Z Bub 4-Jul-03/7:24 PM Reply
Much obliged, my good man.
[10] horus8 5-Jul-03/1:40 PM Reply
GQTIP AWARDE. A fine poem.
[n/a] david › horus8 5-Jul-03/10:57 PM Reply
Thank you. It's one that I've had sitting about for some time now, scrawled hastily on a piece of looseleaf. I recently found it in a coat pocket that I was taking in to be drycleaned, and I thought it would be of sufficient quality to post here.